Protect the flock! From JP and Hachette!
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Permalink Reply by Contradiction on
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What's the character's actual name?
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Permalink Reply by Fake on
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Er, Ex_Kn_#13_Con
...It makes sense in context.
And yeah, he has a bit of a fetish for bad luck, to the point where he's worked hard to get the thirteen in his name.
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Gathered that, what with the comma and all.
*no suggestions* btw. The nicknames I've given my characters have no relation at all to really much of anything (por ejemplo, Atlas. Don't even ask).
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I think I'm just going to stick with Jack of all Spades, TBH. I was considering Black Cat, Lucky Thirteen, or Thirteenth Chime but none of those really work.
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Permalink Reply by SilverMoonArcher on
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Broken mirrors (Shatterglass sounds nice but it doesn't sound like your style), dropped salt, the color white in Chinese culture, the color black in Western culture.
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Heh, I like that one.
Though it's all rather meaningless without context.
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>_> I hate the plot I've written, but I'm too lazy to change it.
Would someone kindly take a look at it and tell me if I'm just worrying too much and being self conscious or whatever?
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Right, keep in mind that this is, in my eyes, the worst storyboard I've ever written, and cliched as all hell. So even if you hate it, I'll agree with you.
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My thought was a guild/family of non-denominational exorcists, who's job it was to hunt down monsters, demons (Not really demons, but that's what they're called), et cetera, and slay them. One particularly skilled young exorcist grows to realize that the enemies he's fighting aren't so different from humans, and decides to defend them.
Notes:
The exorcists fall under a variety of combat classes, and each exorcist is mastered in one.
Exorcists are all basically test tube babies, born from an artificial womb and given artificial DNA rather than natural (Actually possible with today's technology, just nobody wants to pay for it.) They're essentially created to be perfect, and all look the exact same, although the males look different from females.
The Exorcists follow their own religion, which is essentially a screwed up version of Christianity. I am not making a statement about Christianity here, merely saying that it's what the Exorcists chose to indoctrine their soldiers because it happened to be popular at the time they decided to give their soldiers religion. Also, it makes it easier to hate them if we have them pervert a popular religion. Audience is key.
The exorcists emply a combination between ESP and black magic.
AA is an all-seasons boarding school that protects it's students, who range from kindergarten to college. Most alumni's get jobs working either there or, if they're feeling risky, with humans.
In this story, the antagonists are the Exorcists. Obviously. Humanity itself is slightly to blame--if they learned about the demons, they'd probably do what humans do and act all racist for a few centuries--but the actual bad guys are the Exorcists. Or, rather, the Exorcist higher ups.
My thoughts so far (Not very far along, but I digress...)
Prologue: Takes place during Jack's rebellion. He essentially kicks the ass of a bunch of exorcist knights. No name is given to him, and he's intentionally left undescribed. Third person. Takes place a month before the actual story begins. Referred to by code name rather than nick-name. We give the impression that he's the bad guy. Leave things ambiguous.
Chapter one: Third person, still. Focuses on Aurora, a student. Goes through regular school stuff, and we think she's normal...up until the Big Reveal where we show what she /really/ is (Half phoenix or full phoenix. I prefer full. Takes human shape, as do most of the other demons. We'll refer to them all as demons from now on because it sounds cool.) Cue big overview of school, beginning of the school year speech, et cetera. Addressed by the headmaster, a dhampir named Adrian Farenheights Tepes (Son of Dracula. Castlevania referrences for the friggin' win.) She meets her roommate (A female dragon/Dullahan/werewolf/Whatever who’s incredibly pacifistic and shy and whatnot) and they go to bed.
Chapter two: The next day: In the middle of a speech by Adrian, a human boy walks into the room. Adrian addresses him as his son, and bids his students and faculty to kindly treat the boy as one of their own. Immediately, they all scramble to hide their true forms, believing him to not be in on the masquerade. Hilarity ensues. Eventually, the boy—Jack Tepes, apparently—reveals that he knows more about the occult and supernatural than the demon students themselves do. Cue shock, and the demons wondering just who he is.
Chapter three: Aurora investigates. She sees that Jack has a number of odd habits, and features—he’s seemingly emotionless, he always carries a broom with him, he has an odd way of speaking and moving, he watches the demons and takes notes, and he always aces all of his exams. To add to this, he’s extremely rude and heartless in his speech, if somebody asks him a question he answers truthfully, not padding the truth in any way. (Maybe not. Still thinking.) All in all, a strange kid. Soon, Aurora finds that he has the exorcists mark—a barcode on his wrist that identifies him by creation date, metaclass, number, and possibly faction. Considering him a spy, she prepares to kill him—only to be interrupted by the Exorcist Guild attacking. The demons try to stop the exorcists, but prove no match against the might of the exorcists. Suddenly, Jack springs into action, and prepares to fight—to the shock of everyone but Adrian, who just smiles, and says something badass.
Chapter four: Jack kicks ass. Kills a lot of exorcists, to the horror of no-one but Aurora’s roommate… (This will change as time goes on, as they grow to realize that the exorcist knights are just as much victims of all of this as they are. Also, not sinking to their enemies level and whatnot.) Cue time skip where everyone is questioning Jack and Adrian. They give no answer, and pretty much ignore the entire event, pretending things are normal. Aurora questions the hardest, and through research uncovers the truth about Jack—he’s Jack of all Trades, a feared and hated figure in the demon world who has killed countless innocent demons. Jack admits the truth when confronted with it, but says he’s changed, athough doesn’t say why. Nobody trusts Jack after the truth is revealed, despite him saving them. Jack acts nonchalant.
Chapter five: Jack starts teaching a class on exorcist combat, showing the weaknesses and hidden secrets of the exorcists. People still hate him, but begin to change their minds. Aurora doesn’t. Still, during the next exorcist attack, they successfully fend the exorcists off without using Jack. Victory seems in their grasps…up until a meister appears. (Note: A meister is a master exorcist who’s specialized in a single field.) Said meister is one of Jack’s old friends. He tries to talk Jack out of helping the demons, but Jack declines. They fight. Epic fight. Jack seems to be losing.
Chapter six: Jack seems to be killed, but after the Meister turns on Aurora, Jack suddenly turns out to be alive, and manages to defeat his old friend. Jack doesn’t kill him, and tries to spare his life, but the demons rip his old friend to shreds. Jack goes berserk and start attacking everyone. Adrian tries to restrain the boy, Jack starts crying. Weeping. Whatever. Jack is hospitalized due to his injuries, and falls into grief at the death of his friend. Nobody feels bad. Only Aurora’s roommate feels bad for Jack, and convinces Aurora to go talk to Jack. They go. Meeting a broken Jack, he opens up to them, and tells them about his life. End chapter just as he begins.
Chapter seven: Jack’s past is reviewed. Horrible growing up conditions, child soldier, brainwashed. Had three friends, one of whom becomes the meister in the present. Story of his life and whatnot. Shows him killing a lot of innocent demons, and he shows grief for what he’s done. Finally, it reveals one of his latest missions, the thing that made him see demons as humans: He went on a mission to kill a town of demons. Underground. Suddenly, an earthquake happens, killing Jack’s squadmates and injuring him severely. He dies.
Chapter eight: He’s brought back by a demon, and nursed back to health. Said demon is a pacifist, and believes in helping anyone in need—including her enemies. He learns about a hidden village full of demon children and whatnot, and spends some time there, surrounded by pacifists who accept him and treat him equally. They don’t hate him. Amazed at how peaceful demons are, he changes his mind about them and goes to his superiours after he’s healed and repaid the demons for their kindness with the good news, telling them that they don’t have to kill all demons. The superiours nod, and smile, and send out their troops to destroy the village Jack found, killing everyone in it. Horrified, Jack questions their actions—only to be declared rogue, and attacked. Jack fights for three days nonstop—without food, water, or rest—before defeating all of the exorcists sent after him. After this, he escapes their grasps, and flees to the one place that can protect him—Alucard Academy. Before school starts, he breaks into Alucard Academy. Adrian, recognizing him as Jack of all Trades, and prepares for a fight—but Jack begs for forgiveness and aid before finally collapsing, incredibly tired. Adrian imprisons Jack, but also gives him medical assistance—at which point he learns what happened. Deciding to give Jack a chance, he risks everything on Jack not lying about his face-heel turn—and it pays off. Jack becomes his greatest ally, his greatest asset. After Jack has healed, he sends Jack off to get a certain object—Arthur’s holy sword, Excalibur. Jack goes off in search for it, and returns a month later with it in hand—during the opening ceremony, where our story begins. Exhausted, Jack finishes telling his story, and falls asleep. Aurora and her roommate exit, thinking about what happened.
Chapter nine: Jack recovers quickly due to the magicks the exorcists performed on him, and quickly his old life resumes. Aurora and her friend (Screw it, I’m giving her a temporary name Her name is Vie, short for Violet. Change it if you want) begin to grow close to Jack, trying to become his friend, and begin to learn that, rather than being emotionless, he’s extremely emotional, and weak—he’s just not used to expressing his emotions. The seasons pass, more exorcists attack the Academy, the students grow stronger, and Jack becomes less scary to the students—they begin to see him as one of them. Jack starts coming out of his shell. Light slice of life stuff, maybe.
Chapter ten: Continue slice of life stuff. I don’t know, I’m not good at this sort of stuff. Maybe a school festival? Whatever. Anyways, things are going nicely, everybody’s happy, and then…bam! At the very end an entire army of exorcists attack. Cue horror.
Chapter eleven: Jack kicks more ass, but starts to become overwhelmed. Adrian goes into the battle. Vie, having not fought in the past battles due to her pacifism, suddenly goes crazy when she thinks Jack has died. Turns out she was in love with him. Huh. Turns out to be even more powerful than Jack. Suddenly dies as the head knight comes into the fray and cheats. Jack goes berserk, turns out to still be alive. Who knew? Anywhom, the chapter ends on a cliffhanger as Jack faces off against the head Knight.
Chapter 12: The head knight and Jack talk. Head knight turns out to be Jack’s old friend. Depressing. A fierce battle occurs between them, and a barrier is put up to make sure nobody interferes. The exorcists almost win the war…until Jack uses Excalibur to defeat the head knight, ending the battle as all the Exorcists realize that this guy just took down the most powerful warrior in existence. Jack, for the first time in his life, spares his enemy. Declaring himself the new head knight, he forces all of the exorcists at the battle to surrender or face his Excalibur. With no choice, they comply. Jack and Aurora check up on Vie, but things were as they appear—she’s dead. For good. Depressing, neh? After grieving for a while, Jack decides to lead the exorcists into battle against the Exorcist Guild Headquarters. Adrian turns out to have been wounded and near death, and as he dies he gives Jack his greatest weapon: A scroll sealed with incredible magic, said to contain a magic capable of ending wars in a single strike. Jack thanks him, and prepares for battle.
Chapter thirteen: Jack and friends invade the castle, and a massive battle ensues. Armed with the weapons taken from the dead and captured exorcists who attacked AA, the battle is leaning towards the side of the demons. The Rooks guarding the castle put up a fight, but ultimately are defeated. Jack, powered by his anger and hate, fights through and manages to get to where the head of the entire organization is being protected—the center of the castle, the throne room, whatever. He enters it, and prepares to fight.
Chapter fourteen: He’s welcomed as he enters, by an apparently amiable and affable leader—the Head King. Angered, he tries to fight the king, but finds all his magic drained as he enters the throne room—the exorcists granted him his magic, they sure as hell can take it away. All the physical trauma he’s been put through suddenly catches up, and he collapses, not unconscious but severely weak and defenseless. The Head King starts torturing him, and through the torture reveals the awful truth. Cue cliffhanger.
Chapter fifteen: It turns out that the exorcists know that demons are not evil. The real reason they hunt demons is because they’re being paid and ordered to—by demons themselves. Specifically, the most powerful, corrupt, and evil of demons—the greatest demons who ever lived. The exorcists guild was created, not to eliminate demonkind, but to destroy any potential competition. The head demons liked where they were, liked all the wealth and power, and wanted it to stay that way. And so they created the exorcist guild—a guild that mixed human DNA with that of monsters, creating hybrids designed to eliminate all powerful demons who weren’t a part of the upper class. In other words? The knight’s sole reason for existence was a lie. And the demon who started it all…was Adrian himself. But Adrian, like Jack, realized that what he was doing was wrong, and rebelled against his creation, tried to destroy it. Unsuccessful and stripped of most of his powers, he hid in the school he built, and prepared for his counterattack. To him, Jack was a godsend—his only way to destroy the thing he built. But, the truth was…Jack was intentional. Everything that Jack did—his rebellion, his killing of the head knight, even him making it to the Head King…it was all planned and intentionally instigated. In other words, Jack did everything they wanted to. He fell right into their trap. Jack had become the strongest exorcist—through his skill and his rage—and that was what they wanted. They wanted Jack to become the strongest exorcist, wanted to succeed. So they could use him. They were planning on enslaving him, controlling his mind, and using him against all the underground and hidden demons. He would have the power of a god at his fingertips, and they would be his puppet masters. And so they did just that. Forcing his demonic DNA into overdrive, they took over his mind, and gave him an incredible power boost to boot.
Fin.
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